Wow! It's so refreshing to have actionable feedback that takes the entire manuscript into account. Thanks, Pam. Your suggestions are spot-on and I'm really looking forward to developing on the scenes you've suggested. I just wish I'd had your feedback months ago because I know I would be much further along - exactly what I needed to start the creative juices flowing and I've already started to draft scene ideas for the 'new and improved' ending. I'm looking forward to continuing working together.
The Weaver's Coin
I found all your changes pretty spot on! You really helped cut the excess fat away from my prose, making a lot of sections flow better than I think they did before. Also, I feel like you nudged some imagery that I'd been unable to convey accurately into the right place.